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[雅思培训]简述雅思写作结构语料法

来源:朗阁教育17-04-21编辑:朗阁小编0人看过

本文中,朗阁老师将通过雅思写作Task 2“Introduction”段来展示如何通过“结构语料法”实现“巧妇可为无米之炊”。

摘要:Task 2的“Introduction”段作为雅思写作Task 2的开篇,极大地影响了整篇文章的行文结构及临场心态。一个好的“Intro”段几乎就能确保审题不偏题,段落安排合理。

 

本文中,朗阁老师将通过雅思写作Task 2“Introduction”段来展示如何通过“结构语料法”实现“巧妇可为无米之炊”。(备注:“巧”,即基于雅思写作权威评分体系,去形成写作结构规范;“无米之炊”即借助“结构语料法”来积淀结构性语料,在接近0基础的语言基础下,实现精准飞跃)

 

一、真题展示

Developments in technology are causing many environmental problems. Some people think that people should choose a simpler way of life. Others think that we should use technology to solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. (20150509)

 

二、0基础学员原因段展示

Word count:48

Score:6.5

Currently, it is true that rapid growth in technology leads to many environmental issues, which has been considerably affecting the sustainable development of the whole nation.From my perspective, the favourable aspects of advanced technology, in tackling environmental problems, carry more weight than those of simple lifestyle.

译文:现如今,事实上科技的发展导致了许多环境问题,显著影响到整个国家的可持续性发展。在我看来,先进科技在处理环境问题上的有利之处胜过简单的生活方式。

 

三、考官点评

1. Task response:

Score 7, 合理引出话题,观点明确

1). the candidate has introduced the task properly

2). the positionis clear

2. Coherence and Cohesion:

Score 7, 全段衔接行文逻辑合理

the extent are organized and presented appropriately

3. Lexical Resource:

Score 6, 无基础性用词错误,且搭配用词稍有亮点

uses a good range of vocabulary for the task and attempts to use less common vocabulary

4. Grammatical Range and Accuracy

Score 6, 无基础性语法错误,且善用复合句结构

has good control of grammar, especially the use of complex sentences and make no errors

 

四、Introduction段结构分析

1.Background

2.Public opinions

3.Personal view/ brief of main body

即通过一定的现象背景,引出公众的某种或者不同看法,进而表明自我立场。

 

五、段落结构语料概述(详见现场演绎版)

1. Background

现状:即通过话题观点相关的现状,来引出话题

结构语料:“Currently,it is true that...”

解析:对于0基础而言,“现状”的写法,仅推荐从题中题干及观点找出可以作为当下现状的句子,进行基础改写(简单搭配替换、主被动调整)即可。

如以上学生真题练习中,仅对于题干的第一句话进行基础改写:

“Developments in technology are causing many environmental problems.”

如下:

Developments→rapid growth;are causing→lead to;problems→issues

后果:前句话题相关现状产生的显著影响,来进行合理拓展

结构语料:“,which has been considerably affecting...”

解析:

1). 对于0基础而言,“后果”的写法建议使用易于理解的非限制性定语从句(which指代前面现状)及现在完成进行时(现状一直存在并影响下去)的语法。通过语境,提升基础语法表现。

2). 影响细节:(建议0基础备考者,所有题目从如下角度考虑提升基础用词搭配)

个体影响:

(1). individuals' prospect and self-fulfillment

(2). individuals' physical and mental fitness

(3). individuals' daily lives、convenience

企业、家庭、国家、社会等影响:

(4). enterprises'/social/national/family's prosperity

(5). …stability and cohesion

(6). the sustainability of…

3). 如上学员习作“the sustainable development of the whole nation”选择使用“(6)”的基础版表达。

 

2. Public opinion(s)

Thus/whereas, there has been a cause for a constant concern:单观点改写/双观点合并

解析:如上学员习作未写此部分。对于0基础而言,建议舍弃。

 

3. Personal view(argumentation类Task 2)

From my perspective, the favourable aspects, 细节,of… carry more weight than:

1). the adverse impacts on/of…

2). that/those of…

 

解析:个人观点的完整性尤为重要。对于基础薄弱的备考者,不推荐一边倒的写法,故而观点中包含明确的对比关系,形成如上结构。

 

六、参照如上结构语料体系进行真题演练

Interviews form the basic selecting procedure for most large companies. However, some people believe interview is not a reliable means of choosing who to employ and there are some other better methods of selection. Do you agree or disagree? (20151203)

 

In modern enterprises, it is true that interviews are the basic method to select employees for most large companies, which has been considerably affecting the prosperity of whole company. (Whereas there has been a cause for a concern: whether other ways, such as recruitment from other firms and promotion from are better than interview.) To my knowledge, the favourable aspects of interviews carry more weight than other means.(65words/26words:删除公众观点后)

 

More and more adults live with their parents after they have finished the education and been employed. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages? (20150430)

 

In the contemporary society, it is increasingly common that a host of individuals would live with parents after graduation and being employed, which has been considerably affecting their ability of independence and family cohesion.From my perspective, the positive impacts on convenience and safety of this choose carry more weight than its adverse aspect, the reduce of freedom. (60words)

 

七、17年新题,永远的套路

Some people think the technology makes life complex,so we should make life simpler without using the technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (20170218)

 

解析:

现状:一些科技使得生活复杂(题中观点提供灵感)

后果:显著影响生活便利、家庭凝聚力

个人观点:在我看来,科技在使生活更便利上的意义,胜过它的负面影响。

 

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